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 ===Background===
-Before his Nasod arm could overheat one too many times and fail him in battle, he approaches the Ponggos for their expertise in weapons.
+The Nasod arm may be capable of massive destruction, but Raven is alarmed that it is overheating far too often now. The mercenary needs to get it fixed before it fails him in battle, and before long, he approaches the Ponggos for their expertise.
-They promptly send him out to collect rare materials for the repair: Ignis' arm that blasts out nuclear flames, for greater firepower; the dark steel of Durahan Knight, for better heat resistance; and enchanted, mass-altering golem fragments, for making the usually heavy dark steel easier to carry. Gathering all these materials from such huge, dangerous monsters is clearly not simple, but Raven succeeds nonetheless.
+Raven is then sent out to collect rare materials for the repair: Ignis's arm that blasts out nuclear flames, for greater firepower; the dark steel of Durahan Knight, for better heat resistance; and enchanted, mass-altering golem fragments, for making the usually heavy dark steel easier to carry. Gathering all these from such huge, dangerous monsters is clearly not simple, but Raven succeeds nonetheless.
-The Ponggos complete the Nasod arm enhancement, and soon pushing the overheat system to its limits, Raven becomes the distinguished '''Veteran Commander'''—a temperamental yet compassionate leader of fighters.
+The Ponggos complete the Nasod arm enhancement, and soon, Raven becomes the distinguished '''Veteran Commander'''—a temperamental yet compassionate leader of fighters.
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